Legality Whence?

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meenas17
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Legality Whence?

#1 Post by meenas17 » 11 Aug 2019, 14:50

An oath, a vow,
one of a life pact.
taken before God,
with I swear on the Bible
in an altar of a cathedral
in case of Christians.

A ceremony with
hundreds in attendance
the tying of "mangalasutra"
to the chanting of Vedic hymns
before the fire, Gods invoked
as in an Hindu marriage.

A union of two individuals.
to the recitation of Quran
along with a payment of Mahr
when the man avows to take care
of the bride financially
as seen in the Islamic faith.

Remain and held with great honour
in most marriages, while
separations occured in olden days rarely,
one finds breaks quick and many
during the recent years for
reasons flimsy and strange.

The promises made in the altar
and before the fire, valid
than the legal entities
go with the wind. Law enters
unexpectedly. Man and wife
go to court, seek remedy
and end up with a divorce.
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Kenneth2816
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Re: Legality Whence?

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 11 Aug 2019, 15:40

Like how you weave many faiths Into a single tapestry.

FranktheFrank
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Re: Legality Whence?

#3 Post by FranktheFrank » 11 Aug 2019, 16:18

You make a valid point Siva
the law condemns because none can keep it

BobBradshaw
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Re: Legality Whence?

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 11 Aug 2019, 20:12

I agree with Ken. Those first 3 stanzas are the heart and soul of the poem...they’re very nice

meenas17
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Re: Legality Whence?

#5 Post by meenas17 » 12 Aug 2019, 13:48

Thanks, Bob and Ken.
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meenas17
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Re: Legality Whence?

#6 Post by meenas17 » 12 Aug 2019, 13:49

Thanks, Frank.
It is Meena not Siva.
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FranktheFrank
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Re: Legality Whence?

#7 Post by FranktheFrank » 12 Aug 2019, 20:28

My apology, Meena.

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