Bull and the Chinaman

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Kenneth2816
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Bull and the Chinaman

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 25 Aug 2019, 14:34

Back from the war a Sergeant,
he was quick with his hands.
A lot of guys had scars to prove it.

She was intellectual, erudite,
read Camus and Nietzsche,
on the Homecoming Court.

Third date at the County Fair,
A man was hawking cast iron
cookware, bragging at how

it radiated heat." Look at that!"
If anyone can hold that pan
I'll give ya a free set."

Caught between paydays,
mad with love, he reached
without flinching. There was

the faint smell of burnt bacon,
and just like that, she broke him
into a thousand beautiful shards.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Bull and the Chinaman

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 25 Aug 2019, 19:58

Like the first 2 stanzas best...

Kenneth2816
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Re: Bull and the Chinaman

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 26 Aug 2019, 01:12

Ty Bob. Did it come across this was a play on the phrase " bull in a China shop "?

meenas17
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Re: Bull and the Chinaman

#4 Post by meenas17 » 26 Aug 2019, 10:18

Know, love is blind but now understand it is heat resistant too.
Good work, Ken.
meenas17

Kenneth2816
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Re: Bull and the Chinaman

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 26 Aug 2019, 11:08

Lol. Ty meenas

BobBradshaw
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Re: Bull and the Chinaman

#6 Post by BobBradshaw » 26 Aug 2019, 19:13

Yes, it did... nice poem

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