Found you Again on Facebook

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capricorn
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Found you Again on Facebook

#1 Post by capricorn » 28 Aug 2019, 03:06

Found You Again on Facebook

A feather-touch on my shoulder
and husky whisper - Like to Dance?
We twisted, jived, eyes writing love-notes.

You fed me Black Magic, hungry lips
mouthing frisky fingertips. The faded box
still hides your letters at the back of my wardrobe.

You were a sandy-haired Paul McCartney,
Beatle cut is side brushed now, greying;
I squint, struggling to recognise any feature,

fifty years has fuzzed details of your face.
You look so much like my late grandpa,
an aging, spectacled man, with a paunch.
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Deleted last stanza

But I’ve found you!
Logging out, I shutdown, limp away -
my crumpled image caught in the mirror.

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 28 Aug 2019, 05:08

Liked reading this.Till the logging out, everything sounds as if it is a face to face recognition.

S

BobBradshaw
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 28 Aug 2019, 19:37

Lovely, warmhearted poem....I would end the poem on "paunch".

Kenneth2816
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 28 Aug 2019, 22:22

Eira. This is a warm, inviting poem
Since you have Facebook in the title, I concur about ending with launch or change the wording

capricorn
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#5 Post by capricorn » 03 Sep 2019, 02:46

SivaRamanathan wrote:
28 Aug 2019, 05:08
Liked reading this.Till the logging out, everything sounds as if it is a face to face recognition.

S
It is memories, Siva

capricorn
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#6 Post by capricorn » 03 Sep 2019, 02:46

SivaRamanathan wrote:
28 Aug 2019, 05:08
Liked reading this.Till the logging out, everything sounds as if it is a face to face recognition.

S
It is memories, Siva

capricorn
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#7 Post by capricorn » 03 Sep 2019, 02:47

BobBradshaw wrote:
28 Aug 2019, 19:37
Lovely, warmhearted poem....I would end the poem on "paunch".
Yes, I suppose the last stanza is not needed

capricorn
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#8 Post by capricorn » 03 Sep 2019, 02:50

Kenneth2816 wrote:
28 Aug 2019, 22:22
Eira. This is a warm, inviting poem
Since you have Facebook in the title, I concur about ending with launch or change the wording
Have deleted last stanza

Eira

meenas17
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Re: Found you Again on Facebook

#9 Post by meenas17 » 03 Sep 2019, 03:57

Facebook has become part of our life.
It is being referred to in a poem.
This one, Eira, is as by far the comments go gentle and warm.
meenas17

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