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On The Shelves

Posted: 13 Sep 2019, 18:00
by meenas17
lie my literature
books.perfectly bounded
neatly covered in
brown.

They are my proud
possession, been
with me for years
right from my
college days,

Those days,
how I read line by line
the poems and dramas.
how much I enjoyed,
how well I performed,

History Of English Literature
a wholesome edition,
a bit of a drab, one of facts
posed a challenge, had to go through
with effort to sit for examinations.

As I turn the pages
I go back to my classrooms.
the voice of my professor
reading the play
"AS You Like It" lingers.

It being one of the comedies
of Shakespeare, excites
bears lot of fun,.The professor
becomes involved, thinks herself
as Rosalind, she goes into a frenzy.

As memories crowd ,
I keep back the books
again in order. Might be,
the next time, I reach out
I should spend little more.

Ah! the good old days.

Re: On The Shelves

Posted: 14 Sep 2019, 12:56
by Kenneth2816
Good premise. Enjoyable, we can all relate. My library is a source of pride and comfort

Re: On The Shelves

Posted: 14 Sep 2019, 19:48
by BobBradshaw
Good topic.... just thoughts...S1 can be trimmed a bit. I really like S2, and the breaks. s3 is good. s4 can be simplified? s5...Shakespeare doesn't need to be mentioned...we all know it. excites...bears lots of fun...choose one, not both descriptions....enjoyable poem....just needs some simplifying....and the line "little more" ....should either be "more time " or "a little more time"...

lie my literature
books, perfectly bound.

s4's lines that maybe can be improved on...somehow simplifying challenge and examinations into one line, not two?
one of facts
posed a challenge, had to go through
with effort to sit for examinations

Re: On The Shelves

Posted: 15 Sep 2019, 12:50
by meenas17
Thanks Ken.

Re: On The Shelves

Posted: 15 Sep 2019, 12:51
by meenas17
Yes , trimming could make it better.
I will post a revision .
Thanks, Bob