Heading to Freedom
Are we there, yet?
I’ve been naming
everything I see.
Heard the top ten
songs too many
times, can’t get’em
out of my head.
Coffee keeps me going.
You reach over and
make sure I'm awake.
Darkness, and wheels
turning on asphalt
can hypnotize.
The road is lighted
only a few hundred
feet in front of me.
Orion is dead ahead,
his dogs howling
at the end of leashes.
Even the stars
hunt for freedom.
Heading To Freedom
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Re: Heading To Freedom
Hi Billy,
The 3 line form is apt & the lines stop & roll as they should - the skill with allusion is natural for a strong close - Admiral
Workshop-share:
Coffee keeps me rolling
or
Coffee keeps me perked
The road is lit
at the end of leashes.
Even stars
hunt for freedom.
Billy, I read your poem and wrote these 13 lines:
"awakening"
There will come a morning
I rise from my reclined lift chair
yet I will no longer
hear the rush of traffic
or feel the alarm of time & tempt
like a schrödinger's cat & a yellow canary
released & headlining at Woodstock
the hunting of & the haunting from
the illusion of headed to Freedom - out of mind -
and Infinity - more formidable than the mere redundancy of the meow-mix
from nine lives - no where over the open mic
forever turned on
Thx, Billy, for the inspiration
Michael (MV)
The 3 line form is apt & the lines stop & roll as they should - the skill with allusion is natural for a strong close - Admiral
Workshop-share:
Coffee keeps me rolling
or
Coffee keeps me perked
The road is lit
at the end of leashes.
Even stars
hunt for freedom.
Billy, I read your poem and wrote these 13 lines:
"awakening"
There will come a morning
I rise from my reclined lift chair
yet I will no longer
hear the rush of traffic
or feel the alarm of time & tempt
like a schrödinger's cat & a yellow canary
released & headlining at Woodstock
the hunting of & the haunting from
the illusion of headed to Freedom - out of mind -
and Infinity - more formidable than the mere redundancy of the meow-mix
from nine lives - no where over the open mic
forever turned on
Thx, Billy, for the inspiration
Michael (MV)
Re: Heading To Freedom
Thanks Michael, enjoyed your inspiration.
Yes, going is boring. I like rolling. Perk is too cutesy.
Yes, going is boring. I like rolling. Perk is too cutesy.
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Re: Heading To Freedom
Billy
I like these lines.
Orion is dead ahead,
his dogs howling
at the end of leashes.
Even the stars
hunt for freedom.
Siva
I like these lines.
Orion is dead ahead,
his dogs howling
at the end of leashes.
Even the stars
hunt for freedom.
Siva
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Re: Heading To Freedom
Solid poem. I like the short lines. The reader cruises right through this fun ride.