Beggar's Lice

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Kenneth2816
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Beggar's Lice

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 19 Oct 2020, 16:10

.First, the lush green

tendrils make

a basil rosette.

Beneath the wither

of summer

she brittles,

dispersing her little

ones, the stickseed,

onto the down

of a doe's coat

or between the

ribs of passing

corduroy,

to be reborn

as a mother on

the forest floor.

BobBradshaw
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#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 20 Oct 2020, 07:15

Nice nature piece...no criticisms... enjoyed

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Billy
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#3 Post by Billy » 20 Oct 2020, 19:27

Short but never-ending cycle of a poem, thanks.

Michael (MV)
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Re: Beggar's Lice

#4 Post by Michael (MV) » 21 Oct 2020, 03:02

 
Hi Ken,

evolution of creativity

genesis -> metamorphosis -> maternity


from the forest floor
to be reborn
as mother



from maternity to eternity

8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 

Kenneth2816
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Re: Beggar's Lice

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 24 Oct 2020, 08:19

Thank you

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Re: Beggar's Lice

#6 Post by meenas17 » 24 Oct 2020, 19:28

Theory of evolution in short.
meenas17

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