While I Was Burning

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Kenneth2816
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While I Was Burning

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 13 Nov 2020, 16:51

Shush up now, Marla Reardon,
We are found in a strange land.

Its architecture is alien and
they speak in an unknown tongue.

I told you I'd love you as best
I can and that's all there is to it.

There is no better bargain to be had
for a few dollars more.

BobBradshaw
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Re: While I Was Burning

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 15 Nov 2020, 04:43

I'm not sure what the poem's about, but I really like the tone of it, especially these lines...said with so much confidence

I told you I'd love you as best
I can and that's all there is to it.

Kenneth2816
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Re: While I Was Burning

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 15 Nov 2020, 17:13

Thanks Bob.

meenas17
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Re: While I Was Burning

#4 Post by meenas17 » 15 Nov 2020, 17:31

I always like your poems, Ken.
meenas17

Kenneth2816
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Re: While I Was Burning

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 16 Nov 2020, 07:39

Thanks meenas

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