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In Tien Pho, I became God
as if a slow fat worm entered
my bloodstream, shedding its
white offspring until I was
infested with righteousness,
quick like a pupil dilates.

Then the Cong came in
after the 82nd inoculated,
chopped the arms off children,
piled them ilke cord wood,
inculcated the locals with
doctrine and dogma and rice.

Strong poem. I like "infected with righteousness." The closing 2 lines work well, especially with the reference of "rice".

inculcated the locals with
doctrine and dogma and rice.

Hi Ken,

Workshop suggest for the finale:

indoctrinated the locals
with dogma and rice.




Michael (MV)

Thanks guys