Unseasonal

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meenas17
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Unseasonal

#1 Post by meenas17 » 07 Feb 2021, 18:33

It is unseasonal,
rains come when
they ought not to.

The ready to harvest
crops lie soaked
in water.

Unable to bear
the weight they
droop and fall.

The farmer sighs
money lost, toil
wasted. loans mount.

The long stretches
of his fields held
promising yield,

the day before.
seeing them lying
in waters,

makes his hear break,
wiping his tears, he
walks slowly.

His legs wobble
losing his balance
he slips unconscious.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: Unseasonal

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 07 Feb 2021, 22:21

This is better. Enjoyed

Kenneth2816
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Joined: 01 Jun 2008, 09:17

Re: Unseasonal

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Feb 2021, 14:50

Good expression of destitution

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