Circadian Disruption
Maples disrobe
bedraggled crimson in the shadows
of a feeble sun. Hedgehogs rest
beneath last season’s rumpled throw.
I recline on my sofa, craving
carbohydrates and sunbeams.
Staggering to the window, I draw
the drapes across perpetual twilight.
Lethargy overwhelms as I slump
deeper into my pillows, intermittently
drifting away, until -
sun blinks through the maples,
arms newly buttoned with buds.
Its rays weave a shawl around
my shoulders. When the hedgehog
crawls out from his dishevelled bed
I rise --
and throw back the curtains.
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Daylight dwindles, as maples disrobe
bedraggled crimson in the shadows
of a feeble sun. Hedgehogs rest
Circadian Disruption
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Re: Circadian Disruption
I've read about this.. I know people who are depressed in winter from lack of sunlight, they say.
You chose a nice way to write about it.
Good to read you again.
You chose a nice way to write about it.
Good to read you again.
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Re: Circadian Disruption
This is just lovely. From the opening we know we're in the hands of someone who loves language...My one nit: "Daylight dwindles" isn't necessary. So great to have you back with us!
stellar:
maples disrobe
bedraggled crimson in the shadows
of a feeble sun.
I love this observation...
craving
carbohydrates and sunbeams.
The ending is perfect.
When the hedgehog
crawls out from his dishevelled bed
I rise --
and throw back the curtains.
stellar:
maples disrobe
bedraggled crimson in the shadows
of a feeble sun.
I love this observation...
craving
carbohydrates and sunbeams.
The ending is perfect.
When the hedgehog
crawls out from his dishevelled bed
I rise --
and throw back the curtains.
Re: Circadian Disruption
I like the blinking sun. Agree with Bob’s crit.
Re: Circadian Disruption
Thanks Ken, I seem to write about this syndrome every year. Good to be back.Kenneth2816 wrote: ↑26 Apr 2021, 09:12I've read about this.. I know people who are depressed in winter from lack of sunlight, they say.
You chose a nice way to write about it.
Good to read you again.
Re: Circadian Disruption
BobBradshaw wrote: ↑27 Apr 2021, 08:40This is just lovely. From the opening we know we're in the hands of someone who loves language...My one nit: "Daylight dwindles" isn't necessary. So great to have you back with us!
stellar:
maples disrobe
bedraggled crimson in the shadows
of a feeble sun.
I love this observation...
craving
carbohydrates and sunbeams.
The ending is perfect.
Thanks for your lovely comments, Bob. It's good to be back but lockdowns have stolen my muse. This is a very old one I've rewritten. You're right about the 'daylight dwindles' I've removed.
Eira
When the hedgehog
crawls out from his dishevelled bed
I rise --
and throw back the curtains.