Retirement

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BobBradshaw
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Joined: 03 Jun 2016, 21:03

Retirement

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 15 May 2021, 06:37

Retirement


I was an expert until a week ago,
a yogi of technical knowledge.

Now my in-box has been cleaned out.
My photos removed from the walls.

What's my new role at home?
How can I help?
I'm no handy man.
The new wallpaper that I hung
looks like piled laundry on the floor

and car mechanics
are as baffling as plumbing.
My car splutters as if trying
to hold back its raucous laughter
when I lift the hood.

I admit it; I'm as helpless at home
as one of a hive's drones,
all saunter and swagger
but no contributions.

Retirement's "job requirements"
are impossible to meet,

criticism sure to sting me
the rest of my days.

BobBradshaw
Posts: 1919
Joined: 03 Jun 2016, 21:03

Re: Retirement

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 19 May 2021, 21:14

Tweaked

Kenneth2816
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Re: Retirement

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 20 Jun 2021, 16:55

Just saw this after testing your other fine poem about retirement. Seems it hits men harder than women.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Retirement

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 20 Jun 2021, 20:28

I think you're right; in general it hits men harder.

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