Atypical
Atypical
Carefree and smiling
facing zero impediments
at any moment,
Schooling done easy
University being facile
the outlook of life
brings in splendour,
happiness being
the be all and end all.
Marriage follows, as is the
tradition, with that heavy
responsibilities stream in.
Experiencing a cultural
upheaval, my enthusiasm
dies all too soon.
Demands at every corner,
diffidence always in sight
forces a metamorphosis.
I relinquish my endearing nature
Did I become a shrew?
No, not exactly.
I count every penny,
weigh every turn of events,
think, think to the power of n.
Losing the spontaneity. I am overloaded
carry a bundle of contradictions with
a parcel of contemplation.
Life has treated me harsh.
My smile lives with me prescribing
atypical connotations at various stages.
facing zero impediments
at any moment,
Schooling done easy
University being facile
the outlook of life
brings in splendour,
happiness being
the be all and end all.
Marriage follows, as is the
tradition, with that heavy
responsibilities stream in.
Experiencing a cultural
upheaval, my enthusiasm
dies all too soon.
Demands at every corner,
diffidence always in sight
forces a metamorphosis.
I relinquish my endearing nature
Did I become a shrew?
No, not exactly.
I count every penny,
weigh every turn of events,
think, think to the power of n.
Losing the spontaneity. I am overloaded
carry a bundle of contradictions with
a parcel of contemplation.
Life has treated me harsh.
My smile lives with me prescribing
atypical connotations at various stages.
meenas17
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Re: Atypical
This poem has a number of thoughts. Tying each one with an image would be very helpful. When you do that I think you'll find you can trim most of the telling.
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Re: Atypical
Meena
I think it should be 'harshly' on the last strophe.
Life has been harsh
or
Life has treated me harshly.
I think it should be 'harshly' on the last strophe.
Life has been harsh
or
Life has treated me harshly.
Re: Atypical
Lots of times I pick a topic or incident that attracts me then try to feel it and think of things that invoke those same feelings.