The Spratts

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Kenneth2816
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The Spratts

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 16 Jun 2021, 18:00

Each night's supper is the same:
Canary feathers and marrow bone.

He lights his pipe, stokes the fire,
his one good suit in the wardrobe.

The dolorous abbey bells call him
to bed at eight o'clock. His wife is

already there, snoring, feet like ice,
taking most of the covers, dreaming

of finger pies, cherries and cream,
Yorkshire pudding and that she had

married that fool from the other
poem who jumps candle sticks


* finger pie is British slang for digital intercourse.

BobBradshaw
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#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 16 Jun 2021, 19:39

Terrific sense of humor. Enjoyed

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#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 17 Jun 2021, 00:16

Hi Kenneth,

Yes, like a fractured fairytale with contemporary & universal relevance

Thanks for the digital note left at the foot

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#4 Post by meenas17 » 17 Jun 2021, 15:29

Enjoyed, Ken, especially the lines,

married that fool from the other
poem who jumps candle sticks
meenas17

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#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 18 Jun 2021, 00:24

I like this unusual poem with its odd characters. I like how you are adventurous and take chances. Strong voice. Thumb's up for me.

Kenneth2816
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#6 Post by Kenneth2816 » 18 Jun 2021, 14:07

Thanks guys

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Billy
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#7 Post by Billy » 25 Jun 2021, 02:55

Fairy tales and characters are such a great source for poetry. I should try one based on such. This one is excellent.

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#8 Post by Kenneth2816 » 30 Jun 2021, 20:56

You should Billy.
Thanks

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