free spirit

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Billy
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free spirit

#1 Post by Billy » 23 Jun 2021, 00:05

free spirit

that's what he called me
both of us bouncing in the bed
of an old pickup
the smell of manure
swirling around us

hitchhikers
friends for a mile or so

i grinned but didn't show it
he was young
didn't know the difference
between a free spirit
and a lost soul

i guess i didn't either
that was the beauty of it
not knowing

BobBradshaw
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Re: free spirit

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 23 Jun 2021, 19:18

Another good one, Billy. I loved reading it.

Michael (MV)
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Re: free spirit

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 29 Jun 2021, 01:42

Hi Billy,

I Admire what All you have done(without crowding) in the small space of 15 short
lines, with a rich subtext..


No wonder it's also, on my short-list

😎

Michael (MV)

Kenneth2816
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Re: free spirit

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 30 Jun 2021, 20:58

Nice feint with line break on bed.

There is so much wisdom in this poem.

My first nom

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Billy
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Re: free spirit

#5 Post by Billy » 02 Jul 2021, 04:17

Thanks Bob, Michael, Kenneth

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Re: free spirit

#6 Post by Kenneth2816 » 02 Jul 2021, 06:52

Good luck

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