Aberfan

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FranktheFrank
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Aberfan

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 14 Aug 2021, 16:55

ABERFAN

If there are no ghosts
Whose voices howl - black-dusted
on the mountain breeze

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Note on the name Aberfan - Source of the River Van
Aber can mean both estuary and source of a river.
Van mutated in Welsh can be ban or baniau or faniau
meaning peak. So estuary of the river from the peak.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Aberfan

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 14 Aug 2021, 20:51

nice question posed

Michael (MV)
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Re: Aberfan

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 15 Aug 2021, 02:46

 
Hi Frank,

Consider this more spectral incarnation, putting the images forefront, then the question as finale 0-

black-dusted cries
voices through mountain breeze -
No ghosts?

Now the question - the doubt - can't stand up to defiant questions.


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Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 

FranktheFrank
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Re: Aberfan

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 18 Aug 2021, 13:24

Thanks, Michael, for your welcomed input.

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