v2:
Training to Be a Star
our husky was always sticking her nose
down a hole, as if it was a top hat
turned upside down, hoping to emerge
with a rabbit, an amateur magician
who time after time revealed
a tunnel as an empty sleeve.
Still Amanda never gave up, moving
from hole to hole the way
a performer goes from one
audition to another,
never giving up on a chance
at her big moment.
Today a wild fluttering clapped the air
like a duck flushed out of its reeds…
Amanda staring back happily at us
as if awaiting our reaction,
a live pigeon in her mouth.
No! No! We shouted.
She tilted her head, puzzled
that we stood--shouting
Let go! Let go!
Gently her jaw opened
and in a spluttering
the pigeon burst into the air.
We rushed to embrace her,
throwing our arms around her neck,
stroking her chin.
She gazed up into our eyes,
her light brown eyes moist,
as if she stood at a stage’s footlights,
"Encore! Encore!" drifting
down from the balconies
like a blizzard of feathers.
v1:
Our Husky Becomes a Star
Our husky was always sticking her nose
down a hole, as if it was a top hat
turned upside down, hoping to emerge
with a rabbit, an amateur magician
who time after time revealed
a tunnel as an empty sleeve.
Still she never gave up, moving
from hole to hole the way
a performer goes from one
audition to another,
never giving up on a chance
at her big moment.
Today a wild fluttering clapped the air
like a duck flushed out of its reeds…
Amanda staring back happily at us
as if awaiting our reaction,
a live pigeon in her mouth.
No! No! We shouted.
She tilted her head, puzzled
that we stood--shouting
Let go! Let go!
Gently her jaw opened
and in a spluttering
the pigeon burst into the air.
We rushed to embrace her,
throwing our arms around her neck,
stroking her chin.
She gazed up into our eyes,
her light brown eyes moist,
as if she stood at a stage’s footlights,
"Encore! Encore!" drifting
down from the balconies
like a blizzard of feathers.
Training to Be a Star
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Re: Our Husky Becomes a Star
Hi Bob,
Thanks for sharing this family & dog portrait. 2 Workshop-shares below -- Frère Noël Michael (MV)
1/
"Our Husky Becomes a Star
Our husky was always sticking her nose"
^^ "husky" in the title; then again already in the 1st line
Stellar Canine
Our husky was always sticking her nose
or
Raising a star
Our husky was always sticking her nose
or
Training to be a star
Our husky was always sticking her nose
2/
Use the name here:
Still Amanda never gave up, moving
from hole to hole the way
a performer goes from one
and here:
Amanda gazed up into our eyes,
her light brown eyes moist,
as if she stood at a stage’s footlights,
Then the pronoun at all other occasions.
BobBradshaw wrote: ↑18 Dec 2021, 09:12Our Husky Becomes a Star
Our husky was always sticking her nose
down a hole, as if it was a top hat
turned upside down, hoping to emerge
with a rabbit, an amateur magician
who time after time revealed
a tunnel as an empty sleeve.
Still she never gave up, moving
from hole to hole the way
a performer goes from one
audition to another,
never giving up on a chance
at her big moment.
Today a wild fluttering clapped the air
like a duck flushed out of its reeds…
Amanda staring back happily at us
as if awaiting our reaction,
a live pigeon in her mouth.
No! No! We shouted.
She tilted her head, puzzled
that we stood--shouting
Let go! Let go!
Gently her jaw opened
and in a spluttering
the pigeon burst into the air.
We rushed to embrace her,
throwing our arms around her neck,
stroking her chin.
She gazed up into our eyes,
her light brown eyes moist,
as if she stood at a stage’s footlights,
"Encore! Encore!" drifting
down from the balconies
like a blizzard of feathers.