In A Flash

[Billy]

In A Flash

Hands in air,
back arched backward,
head unseen as if decapitated.

A frightful and ecstatic pose,
he's either struck with pain
or in mystical revery.

A passerby
inadvertently mimics
the maniacal posture,

jolted out of emptiness,
inebriated by horror divine
he'd only dreamt of.

[Kenneth2816]

Lot of action in this. Because of its brevity and the fact that the last stanza IS the poem, I would change "back arched backward" and cut "after viewing him" because " passerby" already indicates that. I know you need a line there to keep the triplets. ..

[Billy]

Thanks Ken, done.

[BobBradshaw]

For me the first 3 stanzas work well. I am puzzled by the last stanza. Why is “divine” after “horror”? I’m just curious.