Killing Them Softly

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FranktheFrank
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Killing Them Softly

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 24 Jul 2022, 02:59

Found Ekphrastic

The engine purrs,
Kenny changes gear
the exhaust lets out a whoop
of throaty triumph.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Killing Them Softly

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 25 Jul 2022, 20:58

Lots of good writing here. Too many lines to quote. The bolder lines throw me. They don’t seem needed, and break up the flow.

Sorry to hear about health problems. That’s the first priority. Take care, Ieuan.

FranktheFrank
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Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Re: Killing Them Softly

#3 Post by FranktheFrank » 26 Jul 2022, 00:18

Dank je wel, Bob.

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