Sneaking Backstage on my 45th Birthday

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BobBradshaw
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Sneaking Backstage on my 45th Birthday

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 08 Sep 2022, 21:06

Sneaking Backstage on my 45th Birthday

I was suddenly eleven years old.
I stammered. How much
I'd loved his work
since I was 8!
I blushed, my face red
as a tomato frog's.
My knees started to melt
towards the floor.
He grabbed me by the elbows.
"Are you OK?"

He led me to a chair, asked
if I played music. A violin,
when I was younger. It was whiny
like my little sister.

He catered me with smiles and pastries.
The band had a bus to catch.
He waved g'bye from its steps.

My daughters were waiting at home
for the concert's review.
They had pooled their money,
bought a ticket for me
for my 45th birthday.

Why do fans feel compelled
to sneak backstage?
I was blessed with daughters!
What had I been doing?
That night I watched
a bus and my youth
turn a corner.

Kenneth2816
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Re: Sneaking Backstage on my 45th Birthday

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Sep 2022, 18:21

Good slice of life poem. Just distant enough to not be too sugary.

Love that the daughters did this.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Sneaking Backstage on my 45th Birthday

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 10 Sep 2022, 22:07

Thanks, Ken. Good points

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