Black locks bobbing
Oyster pearls flashing her needs
to a suitable boy
Coming of Age
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Re: Senryu - Of Age
Black locks bob
Oyster pearls flash -
time for a suitable boy
.^^ the senryu speaks of the "Of Age"
Oyster pearls flash -
time for a suitable boy
.^^ the senryu speaks of the "Of Age"
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Re: Senryu - Of Age
black locks bob
whire pearls flash -
time for a suitable boy
.^^ the senryu speaks the "Of Age"; not needed in the title. Just "senryu."
Michael (MV)
whire pearls flash -
time for a suitable boy
.^^ the senryu speaks the "Of Age"; not needed in the title. Just "senryu."
Michael (MV)
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Re: Senryu revised
Ieuan, I like this version very much.
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Re: Senryu revised
I dipped my toes into the Senryu pool, Bob.
Thank you.
Strange that the spell-check does not accept the word Senryu (Senryū )
Thank you.
Strange that the spell-check does not accept the word Senryu (Senryū )
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Re: Coming of Age
Thanks Michael,
I don't consider it a Senryu now. Just a short poem.
So I suppose I can title it.
I'm not really into Japanese style poems.
I don't consider it a Senryu now. Just a short poem.
So I suppose I can title it.
I'm not really into Japanese style poems.