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#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 14 Mar 2023, 17:41

When man first made his gods, he
made them portable, terra cotta
from the earth like man was made.

With a stylus he gave them features:
the body of a male with a row of
breasts, sometimes a lizard head.

Then some dark-eyed prophet struck
the ground with his staff and the
water wedged itself back.There

was a pillar of cloud by day, and
at night the fire cast shadow on
the sand, elongating the gods

until they became giants. They say
it rained frogs. The rivers ran black
with blood but, still the people held.

Jesus was a Jew who converted
to carpentry. He made a mean chair,
but no one would sit and listen.

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Re: Testament

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 14 Mar 2023, 20:48

Wow, stellar poem! And that killer close! Kudos

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