Another Day

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Billy
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Another Day

#1 Post by Billy » 25 Apr 2023, 19:34

Another Day

It’s raining.
The old man’s complaining.
He sits in his chair.

The old lady wraps a blanket
around him.
He tells her to sit down

before she falls,
he can take care of himself.
She says I’m practicing,

you’ve taken care of me
all our marriage,
it’s my turn.

He says if it weren’t for you
I’d have died long ago
a miserable pessimist.

He’s warm now. They sit
quietly listening to the rain
and each other’s thoughts.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Another Day

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 25 Apr 2023, 20:32

A very sweet poem. I like the calm in this.

RamanathanSiva
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Re: Another Day

#3 Post by RamanathanSiva » 28 Apr 2023, 08:55

This poem has come out well, The last line takes it to another plane.

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Re: Another Day

#4 Post by Billy » 01 May 2023, 08:11

Thanks Bob and Siva

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