Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

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IndianaDP
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Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

#1 Post by IndianaDP » 15 Dec 2018, 22:36

Rough wood
Western themed bar.

A widow in a red tasseled vest
Puckers her lips saying please.

Photos on the wall
Wild Bill Cody

A cowgirl
Throwing her lasso.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 16 Dec 2018, 02:58

Really love the ending

IndianaDP
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Re: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

#3 Post by IndianaDP » 16 Dec 2018, 06:25

Thanks Bob,

Just trying to get my mind working on something.

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

#4 Post by SivaRamanathan » 16 Dec 2018, 20:41

The second line of each couplet can be in smaller case.

Kenneth2816
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Re: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 14 Jan 2019, 06:33

Been in hospital 15 days, caused as much trouble as 8 could and am surprised to not see this expanded.

Ken

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