Thanks Meena - I have removed the pine pig now!
Eira
Thanks Ken. I like revising almost as much as writing.
Well, thank you, Bob for sticking with me through this.BobBradshaw wrote: ↑06 Feb 2019, 07:19Yes! You have it....your hard work has paid off....there is emotion suffusing the poem....a good poem makes my day...so thank you
Good idea, Frank. I'll look up the details. Should it go before or after the poem?FranktheFrank wrote: ↑10 Feb 2019, 13:54Suggestion Eira:
Place 'Calon Lan' as an epigraph.
with the credit to the song writer and reference the hymn.
Thanks BobBobBradshaw wrote: ↑10 Feb 2019, 21:12I like version 4 better. This line needs a segue... it piles up without one:
Rashers
of ham, sharpened with her apple
chutney and salty butter
on bloomer slices.