March, 1945
Rumors of the Red Army's
approach swirled around us
as we were matched out
of camp by the guards
into the snow, pistols
barking like dogs
at anyone who couldn't
keep up. "The Red Army
is coming," I kept mumbling
between shots,
rags on my feet sticking
to the snow's
ice.
March, 1945 - revised
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Re: March, 1945
Bob, would it be rumour, or would it be news.
It could hardly be rumour when the Germans knew the war was lost.
I think few could have sympathy for the Germans after what they did
to the whole of Europe and especially the murder of so many Russians.
I feel you should close with the man admitting as much.
It could hardly be rumour when the Germans knew the war was lost.
I think few could have sympathy for the Germans after what they did
to the whole of Europe and especially the murder of so many Russians.
I feel you should close with the man admitting as much.
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Re: March, 1945
To the prisoner without the ability to hear news it would be rumors. The scene should be limited to what a prisoner would have known, very little... his world claustrophobic
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Re: March, 1945
Maybe if you used the word guards, it would be more clear