Marooned
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Marooned
A pump in his pocket keeps him alive;
bilge of old sea water from a dying planet.
At night, he slips his human skin,hangs it
In the closet next to his one good suit.
They cut him open once to see the stuff
he was made of: an Indian head penny,
a yellow cats-eye marble and a locket
with a portrait of the queen.
Home is a light year and aeons ago,
he fell from the heavens like lightning.
Alone, he pulls the shades locks the doors
where he is free to be what he is,
a fish-faced monster with three eyes
who promptly at nine, with an unobstructed
view of the southern sky, sips Dewar's
on the balcony, listens to Mozart and waits
for the signal that never comes, the frequency
to trip a diode in his head, the sequence,
the count down to terminus.
bilge of old sea water from a dying planet.
At night, he slips his human skin,hangs it
In the closet next to his one good suit.
They cut him open once to see the stuff
he was made of: an Indian head penny,
a yellow cats-eye marble and a locket
with a portrait of the queen.
Home is a light year and aeons ago,
he fell from the heavens like lightning.
Alone, he pulls the shades locks the doors
where he is free to be what he is,
a fish-faced monster with three eyes
who promptly at nine, with an unobstructed
view of the southern sky, sips Dewar's
on the balcony, listens to Mozart and waits
for the signal that never comes, the frequency
to trip a diode in his head, the sequence,
the count down to terminus.
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Re: Marooned
Good one. Don’t we all feel like outsiders? And mortal?
Love a monster who
sips Dewar's
on the balcony, listens to Mozart
Love a monster who
sips Dewar's
on the balcony, listens to Mozart
Re: Marooned
I actually like the first half better than the last. But I like the whole poem pretty much. Very good.
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Re: Marooned
Thanks Simon. If you're not a troll, welcome to the forum ![🎈](//cdn.jsdelivr.net/emojione/assets/3.1/png/64/1f388.png)
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Re: Marooned
I like this weird poem
weird creature that
sucks bilge water from his dying planet.
Great imagination, really good.
weird creature that
sucks bilge water from his dying planet.
Great imagination, really good.
Re: Marooned
Brilliant poem, Ken. You have a great imagination.
'he fell from the heavens like lightning'.
I think we'll have to watch out next time there's a storm.
Eira
'he fell from the heavens like lightning'.
I think we'll have to watch out next time there's a storm.
Eira
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Re: Marooned
Hi kenneth,
How about a comma after "shades" -
Alone, he pulls the shades, locks the doors
and who for "what" -
where he is free to be who he is,
Or as -
where he is free to be himself,
just workshop-share; not conditional
![😎](//cdn.jsdelivr.net/emojione/assets/3.1/png/64/1f60e.png)
Michael (MV)
How about a comma after "shades" -
Alone, he pulls the shades, locks the doors
and who for "what" -
where he is free to be who he is,
Or as -
where he is free to be himself,
just workshop-share; not conditional
![😎](http://cdn.jsdelivr.net/emojione/assets/3.1/png/64/1f60e.png)
Michael (MV)