The Eunuch. Revised
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The Eunuch. Revised
Starless night in Thebes, I caught him.
A slave-boy , attempting to flee
through the moon gate. I bound
him with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic, washed his body
with lime and pepper-water. He made
no sound at the blade. The names
of his unborn kiss my fingers
the way minnows announce
themselves in solitary bubbles
that break on the surface of a pond.
A slave-boy , attempting to flee
through the moon gate. I bound
him with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic, washed his body
with lime and pepper-water. He made
no sound at the blade. The names
of his unborn kiss my fingers
the way minnows announce
themselves in solitary bubbles
that break on the surface of a pond.
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Re: The Eunuch
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Starless night in Thebes, I caught him.
A slave-boy , attempting to flee
through the moon gate. I bound
him with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic, washed his body
with lime and pepper-water
I am intrigued but a bit lost with the serpents..are they chains in the shape of serpents?
Is the kiss the bleeding? Sorry I’m in a bit of a fog this morning
Starless night in Thebes, I caught him.
A slave-boy , attempting to flee
through the moon gate. I bound
him with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic, washed his body
with lime and pepper-water
I am intrigued but a bit lost with the serpents..are they chains in the shape of serpents?
Is the kiss the bleeding? Sorry I’m in a bit of a fog this morning
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Re: The Eunuch
Whatever works for you, works for me
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Re: The Eunuch
Starless night in Thebes, I caught him.
A slave-boy making for
the moon gate. I put a ring
through his nose, bound him
with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic until
he grew sleek, bathed him
with quicklime and pepper-water.
I sold him to the high priest
for a promise of favor from Horus
and seven casks of oil.
That night, he made no sound
at the blade. They will shave
his head and make him a litter
bearer when he comes into his own.
Sometimes, I hear the murmur
of his unborn, their names kiss
my fingers the way minnows
announce themselves with bubbles
that pop on the surface of a pond.
When I returned to the city,
my fakhir told me my grandsons
were taken in a raid. On the Nile,
there is a bird that stands in
a crocodile's mouth gleaning
the leavings from its teeth.
In a stasis of mutual need,
the beast does not bite.
A slave-boy making for
the moon gate. I put a ring
through his nose, bound him
with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic until
he grew sleek, bathed him
with quicklime and pepper-water.
I sold him to the high priest
for a promise of favor from Horus
and seven casks of oil.
That night, he made no sound
at the blade. They will shave
his head and make him a litter
bearer when he comes into his own.
Sometimes, I hear the murmur
of his unborn, their names kiss
my fingers the way minnows
announce themselves with bubbles
that pop on the surface of a pond.
When I returned to the city,
my fakhir told me my grandsons
were taken in a raid. On the Nile,
there is a bird that stands in
a crocodile's mouth gleaning
the leavings from its teeth.
In a stasis of mutual need,
the beast does not bite.
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Re: The Eunuch. Revised
The closing works better
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Re: The Eunuch. Revised
Thanks. I always value your input
Re: The Eunuch. Revised
This is a winner, Ken. Great revision.
Eira
Eira
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Re: The Eunuch. Revised
Thank you Eira. Means a lot coming from you
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Re: The Eunuch. Revised
Artificiall. Bump to boost the number of views because I'm a narcissist and you are all my source of supply