White Crow
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White Crow
When I was a kid, the old folks
teased , saying you could teach
a crow to talk by splitting the tongue.
You would have been proud
the way I didn't cry at your funeral
in front of perfect
strangers, like you always said.
I almost didn't come ,but who could
resist a last look at the pinched
face, yellow bill dividing its eyes,
one higher than the other
as if rendered by Picasso,
pink albinic feet protruding
like a stuck-out tongue, Goddam?
teased , saying you could teach
a crow to talk by splitting the tongue.
You would have been proud
the way I didn't cry at your funeral
in front of perfect
strangers, like you always said.
I almost didn't come ,but who could
resist a last look at the pinched
face, yellow bill dividing its eyes,
one higher than the other
as if rendered by Picasso,
pink albinic feet protruding
like a stuck-out tongue, Goddam?
Re: White Crow
Ken,
Fantastic verse.
Crows fascinate you,
" ---Yellow bill dividing its eye
one higher than the other
as if rendered by Picasso,"
These lines hold the attention.
Fantastic verse.
Crows fascinate you,
" ---Yellow bill dividing its eye
one higher than the other
as if rendered by Picasso,"
These lines hold the attention.
meenas17
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Re: White Crow
I agree with Meenas...like that Picasso image best.
Re: White Crow
Either i’m dense or just missing something, but I’m quite confused. Also, goddamn isn’t capitalized unless you meant to put a period before it instead of a coma.
I suppose albinic feet could be pink. Like I said I may be i’m Dense and just need to read it a few more times which a lot of good poetry requires.
I suppose albinic feet could be pink. Like I said I may be i’m Dense and just need to read it a few more times which a lot of good poetry requires.
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Re: White Crow
Thanx you Bob.
Billy white crows do have pink feet. Goddamm is certainly optional. I just threw it in really
Billy white crows do have pink feet. Goddamm is certainly optional. I just threw it in really
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Re: White Crow
Hi kenneth,
I lost my workshop response
In essence. I have suggested the finale as
albinic feet protruding
like a pink tongue, stuck-out
Michael (MV)
I lost my workshop response
In essence. I have suggested the finale as
albinic feet protruding
like a pink tongue, stuck-out
Michael (MV)