Return of the fox revised
Return of the fox revised
revision
Return of the Fox
I haven't seen him, but he's there.
Crows caw at every turning leaf.
A smell of apples rotting.
White clouds like shadows
folding in and out of themselves.
It was not his intent to impart
any trace of foreboding.
He left home with no ill-will,
hopes to return before snowfall.
Return of the Fox
I haven't seen him, but he's there.
Crows caw at every turning leaf.
A smell of apples rotting.
White clouds spread across the sky
like coagulated blood.
It was not his intent to impart
any trace of foreboding.
He left home with no ill-will,
hopes to return before snowfall.
Return of the Fox
I haven't seen him, but he's there.
Crows caw at every turning leaf.
A smell of apples rotting.
White clouds like shadows
folding in and out of themselves.
It was not his intent to impart
any trace of foreboding.
He left home with no ill-will,
hopes to return before snowfall.
Return of the Fox
I haven't seen him, but he's there.
Crows caw at every turning leaf.
A smell of apples rotting.
White clouds spread across the sky
like coagulated blood.
It was not his intent to impart
any trace of foreboding.
He left home with no ill-will,
hopes to return before snowfall.
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Re: Return of the fox
Ike personification of the fox. Reads to me as if N wishes to be the fox, escape for a bit. Nice feel, Billy.
Re: Return of the fox
White clouds spread across the sky
like coagulated blood.
this is poetry, Billy.
like coagulated blood.
this is poetry, Billy.
meenas17
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Re: Return of the fox
the prodigal fox
foxy with the metaphor; and clever move to camouflage the fox after the title, so that it isn't seen in the text
Michael (MV)
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Re: Return of the fox
Good, quiet poem, but the “white clouds” spread like congealed blood doesn’t work for me.
Re: Return of the fox
Thanks Bob, doesn’t work for me either.
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Re: Return of the fox revised
Yes, better,
for the change in clouds
Michael (MV)
for the change in clouds
Michael (MV)