Red, Red Moment
It doesn't last; what does?
My light fading. So much I
missed while the stars blaze
for centuries, millenniums.
Somewhere at the center
a star shines too faraway
for it to know of existence.
Darkness thick as ignorance
surrounds it, would snuff it
out like a candle between
its calloused fingers that
never knew a day of labor.
Red, Red Moment
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Re: Red, Red Moment
I like this poem quite a bit. It took me several reads to appreciate it. The heart of the poem is "My light fading..". So much we miss out on because of our brief lives. And even those long haulers the stars will be snuffed out by forces outside their control(like us).
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Re: Red, Red Moment
Hi Billy,
I esp like:
Somewhere at the center
a star shining too faraway
to know it exists for sure.
Also, I like the image Darkness thick as ignorance
The candle snuffed reminds me of the candle imagery in Shakespeare's Othello & Macbeth - and I like that subtle kinship orbiting the classics
workshop consider labor for "work" -
never knew a day of labor.
Michael (MV)
Re: Red, Red Moment
Thanks Bob, Michael.
Michael, I changed work to labor. Thanks
Michael, I changed work to labor. Thanks