"tax man"

[Michael (MV)]

 
in full
moon light
the spider
spins
while the snake
braids
into a rope
dangling
with a judas
jerk



 
 
 

[Billy]

I like this minimalist, especially the ending, "judas jerk"

[Woetrame]

I like this, and the 'judas jerk' is a fine phrase perfectly placed.

In terms of interpretation I read that workers like us are the spiders and the snake is the tax man, but that's not an immediately obvious interpretation. Possibly consider changing 'the spider' to 'we spiders' plural.

The reference to a 'full moon light' is subtly ironic, and fits nicely.

Good work

[ednamode]

i like this poem.
it is beautiful in its simplicity whilst saying everything that needs to be said and more.