Deō Optimō Maximō - D.O.M. - to God, the Best, the Greatest

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Michael (MV)
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Deō Optimō Maximō - D.O.M. - to God, the Best, the Greatest

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 05 Jul 2015, 08:04

 
Free dom
it is done

dumb
the Son frees dom

from dumb to come
to a kind kin-dom.

in Our Father's family
a fore-given to the ultra feeling Free

 

 

 
 
 
 

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Deō Optimō Maximō - D.O.M. - to God, the Best, the Great

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 05 Jul 2015, 13:01

Michael
I don't understand this poem,it is obvious you have carved it out as sparsely as possible.Please represent the group with this poem or keep this for the coming month and send the poem I nominated.

You are the editor.

S

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