At the Bridge

[FrankDire]

On the hooter's call
I cycle out of the docklands
payday, weekend free

Meeting, in her red
jumper, unexpectedly,
Susie at the bridge.

Will I babysit
with her this green night, getting
to know each other.

[Bernie01]

Frank---


very nice.

short and punches well above its own weight.

this was mellow:

Will I babysit
with her this green night, getting
to know each other.


bernie

[FrankDire]

Thanks Bernie
I wrote a form of this 8 years ago
or so it seems
and Michael wrote a long critique showing me how
haiku was supposed to work.
I have tried to follow his advice.