2 for the Solar eclipse spanning South America, July 2, 2019

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Michael (MV)
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2 for the Solar eclipse spanning South America, July 2, 2019

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 03 Jul 2019, 00:28

 
Baily’s Beads https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Baily's_beads


a court 'n sparkling
'round the moon's silhouette

the engagement ring
leading to bands of brilliance

as two become one
in totality face to face


https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Solar_ecl ... ly_2,_2019


2/ solar eclipse  (the honeymoon)

the moon caressive
the sun embracing
orbs ecstatic in a kiss

the earth moves
the sun shines
the moon glows




  
   
  

 

 

meenas17
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Re: 2 for the Solar eclipse spanning South America, July 2, 2019

#2 Post by meenas17 » 03 Jul 2019, 16:53

Could really experience the eclipse.
The lines,
the earth moves
the sun shines
the moon glows,
define the eclipse.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: 2 for the Solar eclipse spanning South America, July 2, 2019

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 05 Jul 2019, 23:09

I like the feel, the sparkle of the first version

a court 'n sparkling
'round the moon's silhouette

the engagement ring
leading to bands of brilliance

as two become one
in totality face to face

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