When They Make The Movie of Your Life

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When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#1 Post by judyt547 » 04 Nov 2019, 04:11

When They Make The Movie of Your Life

You open the mailbox
with a gesture
so commonplace
that only the sound of
high-pitched violins
would alert the audience
that a pivotal,
life-changing scene is about to
unfold. In the morning
after the return mail
has been sent--to the accompaniment
of more violins in a minor key--
your life, not yet visibly changed,
will move forward to the next scene,
the one with guitars.

BobBradshaw
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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 04 Nov 2019, 07:49

Lovely ending!

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#3 Post by judyt547 » 04 Nov 2019, 08:16

Thanks, Bob. While I was constructing this, I kept thinking
of the old Hitchcock movie, "39 Steps" and the way he used music
to set the scenes. It was a fascinating technique. So this is
a bit of tongue-in-cheek homage to that.

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 04 Nov 2019, 14:40

Yeah this is clever. And like the use of music to heighten tension, the narrator doesn't give any details about her life. This is highly imaginative. Good job.

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#5 Post by FranktheFrank » 06 Nov 2019, 03:15

39 steps has been made several time
good film
when you think about it our lives are a number of film sets
and props and actors come and go all he time
Interesting concept.

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#6 Post by judyt547 » 06 Nov 2019, 04:01

Yep. good point. Ours is the full version, complete with surprise endings...=)

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